Can you fix the surface features?

 Kumusta readers,

We are learning how to fix surface features. Surface features are little bits in your writing. Surface features are like finding the ends of sentences and correcting your spelling it is also to change different words that are repeated in the story and you had to replace it with another word. We use surface features to make sure that our writing makes sense and easier for other people to read. Here is an example without surface features: thissentsaChulymakessen Zbuttisrellyhrd to reed. Here is the sentence but with surface features: this sentence actually makes sense but it is really hard to read.

On our Room 9 writing site our teacher put on a link to a story that we had to fix. We made our own copy and put it in our writing folder. We had to read it once and find the end of the sentences. The second time we had to read it, we had to highlight and fix the repeated words and change the word to another word. The 3rd time we read it we had to make sure that we understood it and it was easier to read for the readers. The hard part about the writing was changing the repeated word and replacing the words with different words. The word that I replaced was he, all of the yellow highlighted words used to be he.

This is what we had to fix.

Here is the writing but with surface features.

What word have you over used in stories? Can you see the changes that I have made? If so leave a comment of what changes you see!

Thank you for reading my blog post, I hope you enjoyed and have an awesome day!!!! :D

Mozaik Flower Art

 Kumusta readers,

Today I am posting my mozaik flower art. Mozaik art is a kind of art but you use tiles. Here is a link to some mozaik arts. For 2 weeks our class has been doing mozaik art for the flower show. We used peaces of Resene paint paper, cut them up and glued them into our piece of paper. We had to fill in the inside and create a background using the peaces of paper.

Here is my mozaik art.

Have you ever seen mozaik art before?

Thank you for reading my blog post, I hope you enjoyed and have awesome day!!!!           :D

Addition & Subtraction

Konichiwa readers,

Today I am posting my maths slide that the whole class has been doing for 2 weeks. This maths slide is a adding and subtraction slide. The slide includes column adding and subtracting, and adding and subtracting squares. The slide was challenging the hard part about the slide was the last slide. I have not completed the slide yet but I am trying to figure the last question out.

Here is my unaccomplished slide.

Can you see any mistakes that I made?

Thank you for reading my blog post, I hope you enjoy and have an awesome day!!!!                 :D

Where is the present!

Konichiwa readers,

Today I am posting my story called Where is the present! We had to write a short 3 paragraphs descriptive story about a birthday while also using language features. My story is all about me running 1 hour late for my friends birthday party, but when it was time to give out the present I could not find the present so I had to go back home and find it. The rules of the descriptive writing was to keep it to 3 paragraphs, use as much language features and make it descriptive.

Here is my story called Where is the present!

Have you ever forgotten a gift before?

Thank you for reading my blog post, I hope you enjoyed and have an awesome day!!!!         :D

Weekly Words (Zen)

 Kumusta readers,

Today I am posting my word for this week. This term our teacher does not choose the word of the week, us students choose the word of the week. The word that I chose is Zen, zen is when you feel peace full and relaxed. To complete the word of the week, we needed to go back to our weekly words slide and use a dictionary to find out the definition, an example online and come up with our own sentence.

Here is my slide.

When was the last time you felt zen?

Thank you for reading my blog post, I hope you enjoyed and have an awesome day!!!!          :D

Impostor Story

 Kumusta readers,

Today I am posting part of my story called Impostor. My story, Impostor is all about humanity being destroyed and everyone is on a space shuttle that the space company ASAN sent up, but when they sent up the shuttle that was ASAN's first mistake. 

Last term we learnt about a lot of language features, and the goal of this writing was to use those language features in our story. The hard thing about this story was putting the language features in and using as much as possible in our writing. I had to restart and change my story because the story that I wrote felt harder to explain what was happening and what was going to happen next.

Here is part of my story that I made. 

Impostor

“ERROR ERROR, failed to launch, shuttle sabotaged, impostor among us.” 

Day 1

It is now 3020, all of humanity’s resources destroyed by a failed shuttle launch. Everyone is now on an Asan space shuttle. Asan tried to send up another space shuttle but that was the first mistake that Asan has ever made. The people in the shuttle is only a quarter of the earth's population. Everyone is having a hard time, the impostor is still among us and no one knows who it is. After a couple of days we found friends called blue and red dead in Med Bay. The captain checked the cameras and saw nothing. 

Day 2

I woke up and found that I fainted and woke up and saw orange cooking. Cyan walked up to me and whispered,
“Don't tell anyone.” I ran towards my room and saw my sister yellow, she was crying because her friend blue was found dead. I closed the door and asked her,

“The impostor is really wanting to destroy humanity.”

“We must find this impostor right now, no one must be killed any longer!” She shouted.

Did you know that my story is based on a game called Among us? Thank you for reading my blog post, I hope you enjoyed and have an amazing and fabulous day!!    :D