Capturing You!

Guten Morgan humans,

Yesterday, we were learning to capture our audience by replacing the weak action words and replacing them with strong action words we used thesaurus to find the strong action words. We also learnt to show not tell.

This term we are working on creating a strong narrative a strong narrative needs to be descriptive, consistent and believable for the readers, it also needs to have a strong structure.

Here is a weak sentence.
Bradley smiled.

Here is a strong sentence.
Bradley smiled with a sparkly shine that lit up his teeth.

Can you think of another sentence that is weak and change that sentence into a strong sentence?
Thank you for reading my blog post and i hope you learnt what we are doing for writing, and have a great day.                    :D

Art inspiration

In room 8 we were making animals that inspired us. We got inspired by the NZ artist Sheila Brown. Here is some recap of how we made it.

First we found an animal the inspired us. When we found the animal our teacher printed it. When we got it we color the picture like the real thing. We used pastels to color the picture.

Then we made a background the suited are animal. We put thr ee or two layers of paint when one layer is dried.

We cut our animal and stuck it on our background. We made sentences that said why that animal inspires us. When we finished that our teacher printed it and stuck it on the black paper

We shared our work by showing it in Room 2’s assembly. This is my art work.

The evil monster and the boys

Hi welcome and hello, to my post
In class during writing, we have been had free-writing time. I had fun when I wrote something like this.

This story is about a boy that saved his town in his own dimension. if you are wondering how he saved his town? Well there was a monster stomping on everyone and all the houses.

Once upon a time  there was one boy who was called Cobby who lived in a different dimension.
He was all alone, until he met a llama and three more boys, he found them all crying when he met them
he saw that the three boys were fighting for something. One fine day they told Cobby that when they were
walking along the path they saw a BIG, GIANT, MONSTER stepping on every house. Then
Cobby said “I was prepared for this” and the guys said “what do you mean” “ follow me”replied Cobby.
So they ran into the house and they were impressed with what they saw. They grabbed swords, torch,
bow and Cobby grabbed one robot hand…….. They ran out of the house and the monster  saw them.
the monster attacked them, they were like ninjas fighting one of the boy passed the bow to Cobby and
Cobby shot it in the eye.The big green eyed monster got bigger and Cody said “ guys are you feeling
something?” “I think every attack we make he gets bigger” so they run as fast as they could. But Cobby
went on the back of the giant and destroyed its power of the green light and the town was safe.

                        I enjoyed writing and I hope you                                       have a awesome day